tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8135490.post1898098443501807177..comments2023-10-08T04:10:53.216-04:00Comments on Threshold: Limited Time Only?Jon Makihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02794059462290021799noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8135490.post-17532833304371482252009-11-30T15:30:13.395-05:002009-11-30T15:30:13.395-05:00Nicely done Miggida Maki. Thats a crapload of work...Nicely done Miggida Maki. Thats a crapload of work!Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15638482909501066254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8135490.post-71132291645915183092009-11-30T14:49:52.475-05:002009-11-30T14:49:52.475-05:00Hmm...I wonder if the text got lost in the convers...Hmm...I wonder if the text got lost in the conversion or if I just took a break while writing then came back and forgot to finish it. Probably the latter. I'll have to check.<br />Anyway, I appreciate the feedback. Some of the descriptions are a little light simply because I was in a hurry, and because I was writing about people/places that I haven't given as much thought to. I've actually drawn Fontaine's apartment, for example, but I've never really thought about Kelly's place.<br />I tried to avoid doing too much info-dumping, but there's a lot of info to dump. Glad to hear it was well spread out.<br />As for being over-sexed, well...yeah. That's kind of the point. I've actually got a lengthy, self-indulgent post in the works that explains that.<br />Anyway, thanks again.Jon Makihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02794059462290021799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8135490.post-24017505270493776542009-11-30T14:12:24.241-05:002009-11-30T14:12:24.241-05:00Not sure how well it will show up on Scribd, so he...Not sure how well it will show up on Scribd, so here's my comment.<br /><br /><br /><br />You bastard. That cliff-hanger wasn't at all fair. I want more.<br /><br />Also, you seem to have lost a chunk of writing in the physical description of the Llani. It just ends mid-sentence.<br /><br />This is good stuff. There is a good amount of exposition running throughout, but it's split up and delivered in a way that doesn't ruin pacing. Your characterization and descriptions were good, too. Although, it did seem like many of the characters are a bit over-sexed, but that's probably the prude in me talking. Most of the scenes were set beautifully. I didn't have a problem visualizing Fontaine's apartment or the lion's cage. Some of the other sets could use a little more embellishment, like Jennifer's or Kelly's place. Then again, you have to tread a fine line between sparse and Stephen-Kingian descriptions. Even those that had less detail were still represented in my mind's eye fairly clearly. All of the action was fantastic and very well-written. The scenes between the family characters were all poignant and made me feel sympathetic to each of them. By the end, I really felt I understood how flawed and troubled Fontaine is.<br /><br />Also, poor Jon, getting shot down so thoroughly at the bar.<br /><br />I really do want to read more. Please don't let it end here.Merlin T Wizardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16710710243242876650noreply@blogger.com